Chapter One

After the three Baudelaire children went to the beach to see the horizon, Mr. Baudelaire came in from handling the handlebars. They were having potatoes for snack. While cooking, they talked about their previous lives. Like when they were in Coneal beach, they saw a device that could draw misty figure emerging from the fog, like a photo. And at the Micheal Jackson Mem. Hwy, they saw two cars with youngsters in them collapse. They were tired. They accidently fell asleep. They both dreamed about( I don't know why),they were orphans, and they were being retrieved from the Coney Island. But at the Halem district, they met a executioner and was about to be executed but their executer came and shrieked. So they were gone. They woke up. Then Mr. Poe came in with sons and siblings. Edward Poe, had his hands wet from the murky waters. Albert Poe, had a real knack in facial tissues.

There was one people names “Batelaire.” He was genius but Mr. Baudelaire’s company succeed so his company failed. He wanted to be better off than Baudelaire. But it failed, too. He despaired with family because his company collapsed and failed. It was not trivial thing! It means his house failed. So he made devices with Batelaire youngsters. It was killing Mr. and Mrs. Baudelaire. It means he want to retrieve his wealth. When Baudelaire youngsters went to trip, he will go to Baudelaire’s mansion. 1 day later, he doesn’t want to show his face to them, so put black facial cream on the face. It looks murky Africa people. He was special soldier so he have knack about using bomb. While Baudelaire youngsters were going to Briny beach, Mr. and Mrs. Baudelaire were reading newspaper. Mr. Batelaire was going to Baudelaire’s huge mansion, too. He scarcely go in the mansion. Mr. and Mrs. Baudelaire were watching TV, suddenly Mr. Batelaire emerged. Mr. and Mrs. Baudelaire shrieked and Mr. Batelaire constantly said their bad point and why Mr. Batelaire Company failed. So they absently make fit of face. 5 minutes later, Mr. Batelaire engulfed bomb in his house.

There was one people names “Batelaire.” He was genius but Mr. Baudelaire’s company succeed so his company failed. He wanted to be better off than Baudelaire. But his second company failed, too. He despaired with family because his company collapsed and failed. It was not trivial thing! It means his house failed. So he made devices with Batelaire youngsters. It was killing Mr. and Mrs. Baudelaire to retrieve his wealth. When Baudelaire youngsters went to trip, he will go to Baudelaire’s mansion. 1 day later, he didn’t want to show his face to them, so put black facial cream on the face. It looks murky Africa people. He was special soldier so he have knack about using bomb. While Baudelaire youngsters were going to Briny beach, Mr. and Mrs. Baudelaire were reading newspaper. Mr. Batelaire was going to Baudelaire’s huge mansion, too. He narrowly go in the mansion. Mr. and Mrs. Baudelaire were watching TV, suddenly Mr. Batelaire emerged. Mr. and Mrs. Baudelaire shrieked and Mr. Batelaire constantly said their bad point and why Mr. Batelaire Company failed. So Mr. Baudelaire and Mrs. Baudelaire absently saw Mr. Batelaire. 5 minutes later, Mr. Batelaire threw bomb in his house.

If you are intrested in how Mr. and Mrs.Baudelaire perished,but are not intrested you would be better off read the next chapter.When the youngsters were on the Briny beach, Mrs.Baudelaire was putting a facial cream.It was a rife one.And Mr.poe as sitting on a rickety chair.He despaired because the chair. Then suddenly a gardener came who was working under him.He wanted to go for a holiday.He gave permission,he was going in a horizon way.he liked the gardener because he is knack.The gardener as gone because he wanted to kill the Baudelaires.So thats why he spoke so trivial, so scarcely he had a lack of money.Mr. Baudelaire was englfed in a bad way.Then he went to Baudelaire's house and Mrs.Bauldelaire saw the figure of the gardener but she passed it.She thought it was Mr.Poe.Then she shreiked because he is supossed to be in the bank.She got absently.Nom the gardener be came a execunator,then he drawed the boiler.Then he executed.and it got in to a fire and he got perishied too.and the Baudelaire became orphans.

After the three Baudelaire children went to the beach to see the horizon, Mr. Baudelaire came in from handling the bike handlebars where he worked. They were having potatoes for snack. While cooking, they were talking about days gone by. Like when they were in Corneal beach, they saw a device that could draw misty figure emerging from the fog, like a photo. And at the Micheal Jackson Mem. Hwy, they saw two cars with youngsters in them drive into each other. They were tired. They accidently fell asleep. They both dreamed about( I don't know why),they were orphans, and they were being retrieved from the Coney Island. But at the Harlem District, they met a executioner and was about to be executed but their executer came and shrieked. So they were gone. They woke up. Then Mr. Poe came in with sons and siblings. Edward Poe, had his hands wet from the murky waters. Albert Poe, had a real knack in facial tissues. They talked and talked. But Mrs. Baudelaire made a fire and the Poe family escaped but Mr. and Mrs. Baudelaire died. So Mr. Poe went to the Briny Beach.

If you are not intrested in how Mr. and Mr. Baudelaire perished you would be better off reading the next chapter.When the youngsters were on the Briny beach,Mr. Baudelaire was despairing on the rickety chair and Mrs. Baudelaire was putting a facial cream it was a rife one.Then the gardener came to get permission, to go to see a horizon.He had a good knack of gardening.The gardener was pretending to go tothe horizon actualy he was going to kill them, so that's why he tailed so trivial, scacely he had a lack of money.Mr. Baudelaire was engulfed in a bad way.The gardener came to the house and Mrs. Baudelaire saw the figure of him but she passed.Then about 5 seconds she shrieked because she didn't know who it was!she got absently.The gardener bacame the execunator,he drawed the boiler, he executed.thehouse got into fire he died too.and the kid became orphans.

After the three Baudelaire children went to the beach to see the horizon, Mr. Baudelaire came in from handling the bike handlebars where he worked. Mr. and Mrs. Baudelaire were having potatoes for snack. While cooking, they were talking about days gone by. Like when they were in Corneal beach, they saw a device that could draw misty figure emerging from the fog, like a photo. And at the Micheal Jackson Mem. Hwy, they saw two cars with youngsters in them drive into each other. They were tired. They accidently fell asleep. They both dreamed about( I don't know why),they were orphans, and they were being retrieved from the Coney Island. But at the Harlem District, they met a executioner and was about to be executed but their executer came and shrieked. So they were gone. They woke up. Then Mr. Poe came in with sons and siblings. Edward Poe, had his hands wet from the Hinterland beach's murky waters(Mr. Poe's family went to the Hinterland Beach before they came here). Albert Poe, had a knack in facial tissues(I think he went crazy at that time, he himself said it). The Poe family and the Baudelaire family talked and talked. Mrs. Baudelaire was making baked potatoes. But Mrs. Baudelaire accidently put a tissue into the fire and made a fire and the Poe family escaped but Mr. and Mrs. Baudelaire died. But Mr. Baudelaire told Mr. Poe earlier that the children were in the Briny Beach, and Mrs. Poe can drive the car. So she took her children home. And Mr. Poe went to the Briny Beach to retrieve the Baudelaire Orphans.

If you are not intrested in how Mr. and Mr. Baudelaire perished you would be better off reading the next chapter.When the youngsters were on the Briny beach,Mr. Baudelaire was despairing on the rickety chair and Mrs. Baudelaire was putting a facial cream it was a rife one.Then the gardener came to get permission, to go to see a horizon.He once broke a glass it sound knack.The gardener was pretending to go to the horizon actually he was going to kill them, so that's why he tailed so trivial, scacely he had a lack of money.Mr. Baudelaire was engulfed in a well. So the gardener came to the house and Mrs. Baudelaire saw the figure of him but she passed.Then about 5 seconds she shrieked because she didn't know who it was!she got absently.The gardener bacame the execunator,he drawed the boiler, he executed.the house got into fire he died too.and the kid became orphans.

After children got a permission fron their parents. they went to Briny Beach. and parents looked outh the window. the weather was murky.
After horizon is up in the sky. they fixed the rickety furnitures. But old furnitures still collapsed but Mr. Baudelaire fixed it with knack skill again with professional factory devices. and after that, they turned back their trivial life again. They just retrieved their healthy by resting. and they talked about keeping the land that they talked about keeping the land that they retained. then, they opened the window and saw the misty air.
when they saw the top of the house. they were so surprised. horizon was still shinning and they saw the huge amount of light. They figured out events after this terrible happening. they would absolutely perish and they knew that, too. Because the fire was getting bigger and bigger.

After the children went to the beach, Mr.Baudelaire was doing scientific experiments while Mrs. Baudelaire was packing surprises for each child, 50 books for Klaus, more inventing tools for Violet, and chewing toys for Sunny. The relatives of the Baudelaires are evil. They are jealous that the Baudelaires are rich, very rich.All of them teamed up and planned how to get their hands on the Baudelaire's fortune. So, to get started they set the most flammable fire ever seen on the Baudelaire mansion!

Olivia Kirwin wrote:

   After the children went to the beach, Mr.Baudelaire was doing scientific experiments while Mrs. Baudelaire was packing surprises for each child, 50  books for Klaus, more inventing tools for Violet, and chewing toys for Sunny. The relatives of the Baudelaires are evil. They are jealous that the Baudelaires are rich, very rich.All of them teamed up and planned how to get their hands on the Baudelaire's fortune. So, to get started they set the most flammable fire ever seen on the Baudelaire mansion!

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This is interesting, yet you are not answering the question in full. A part of your response is off topic. I am asking you to talk about Mr. and Mrs. Baudelaire, not about other people we have not met or are unknown. Therefore, your first sentence is good. All the following sentences are off topic.

That being said, there are questions that I do have.
How do you know the Baudelaire relatives are evil? How do you know they are jealous?

Your story is well written with very few mistakes. That is why I am sad to say that you need to do it again.

Yannick

After the children went to the beach, Mr. Baudelaire was doing a very risky scientific experiment while Mrs. Baudelaire was packing surprises for each child,50 book for Klaus, more inventing tools for Violet,and chewing toys for Sunny. Why is Mr. Baudelaire's experiment risky you may ask? Well this experiment was risky because one mistake can cause a very flammable fire, that is why he told the children to go to the beach. He did a tiny mistake by putting 21 grams instead of 20 grams and it caused the most flammable ever seen on the Baudelaire mansion!